CAP 22 CAP 22 - Part 14 - Pokedex Submissions

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HeaLnDeaL

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Alright, let's consider this your 48 hour warning; thread will close in 48 hours. Be sure to follow the thread's OP to a T.
 
Final Submission

Kerfluffle
, the Disparaging Pokémon

X/OR:
Even though it appears weak and soft, Kerfluffle is capable of shattering a boulder in a single blow.

Y/AS: Kerfluffle loves starting trouble, it tends to punch and taunt other Pokémon for fun. Making it generally disliked by others.
 

HeaLnDeaL

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Alright, I consulted CAP's resident GPer regarding grammar and have thus come up with the slate. Please note the having flawless grammar is a requirement for being slated, as stated in the thread's OP. I'll make the poll later when I get home; I'm in a bit of a time crunch right now.

The slate:

Amitghosh
Final Submission

Kerfluffle
, the Fluffy Pokémon

X/OR: Weary Pokémon often fall asleep on wild Kerfluffle, mistaking them for pillows. Most of them never wake up again.

Y/AS: Tame Kerfluffle are popular in Pokémon Contests, as they make an excellent pair with sleeping Munchlax. They like taunting their opponents and fleeing right after.
Deck Knight
Final Submission:

Kerfluffle, the Right Stuff Pokemon

X/OR: Kerfluffle can knock out a grown man in one punch - but it always carries the opponent to their bed to recover afterward.

Y/AS: Kerfluffle's stuffing is made of tightly woven muscle fibers that allow it to be as rigid or soft as the moment requires.
Falchion
Final Submission

Kerfluffle
, the Pillow Fight Pokémon.

X/OR: It is thought to have arisen from a pillow bathed in mysterious rays. Its playful nature and pleasing scent incite others to frolic with it.

Y/AS: Able to dodge attacks with surprising speed, it is friendly but loves to roughhouse. Occasionally, its strange gestures may be mistaken for aggression.
iwantalolly
Final Submission

Kerfluffle, the Punching Pokémon

X/OR: Kerfluffle enjoys to yell and thrash about before seeking refuge to protect itself.

Y/AS: Kerfluffle adores playing with people and Pokémon. However, it usually ends up injuring someone because it likes to be rough and use its fists.
LucarioOfLegends
Final Submission

Kerfluffle
, the Play Pillow Pokemon

X/OR: Kerfluffle's body is extremely light and fluffy. This allows it to avoid attacks and strike at blinding speed.

Y/AS: Kerfluffle enjoys toying with its opponents through verbal taunts. An especially mischievous one will even mess with its own Trainer.
Pika Xreme
Final Submission

Kerfluffle
, the Pillow Fighter Pokémon.

X/OR: It is a born fighter. Even untrained, it can withstand over 100 tons of force. It often teases its opponents.

Y/AS: Despite its soft appearance, it is a very strong Pokemon. It can knock a Delibird out of the sky with a mere Fairy Wind.
Yoshiblaze
Final Submission

Kerfluffle
, the Punchy Pillow Pokemon

X/OR: Using its pillow-like hands, Kerfluffle protects its trainer at all cost from any danger. Kerfluffle will often try to intimidate threats by calling them names.

Y/AS: Kerfluffle is a playful Pokemon that enjoys being around humans, but it will get annoyed if a human or Pokemon tries to sleep on it.
Below are the final submissions that did not make the mistake and the reason why they were DQed:

KirisameAlice: although his/her entries are flawless, he/she misspelled Kerfluffle in the line "Kurfluffle, the Body Pillow Pokémon".
Rasdanation: he/she use "it's" instead of "its" in their X/OR entry, and the second sentence of their Y/AS one is messy in terms of prose.
GreenGogoatttt: his X/OR entry desperately needs a comma, and he fails to capitalize Pokemon in his Y/AS entry.
snake_rattler: he should have used victims' instead of victim's for his Y/AS entry, as "Many of its..." implies that Kerfluffle will probably live its life making more than one Pokemon its victim.
Willow616: he/she fails to end his/her entries with periods and displays general grammar mistakes.
Viridi: he/she uses a comma splice in his/her Y/AS entry.
KeeganSkymin444: he changes tenses from present to past and back to present in his Y/AS entry.
ThePsychoBear: his Y/AS entry contains a sentence fragment and comma splice.
 
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