I'm probably not going to do a final submission, so I'm going to comment on a few dex entries that I think have a lot of creativity but could use some tweaking to become more similar to typical Pokedex entries. I'd recommend that anyone who wants to improve their submission read these!
Black: A solitary Pokémon that disguises itself by bending light with its reflective shell. It is provoked to fury if the shell is scratched or cracked.
Arguably your strongest entry. I think that solitary is an unnecessary adjective and doesn't mesh well with the overall meaning of the entry (its shell). I am typically not a big fan of entries with two different thoughts, but I think these two are short enough that they work out.
White: In battle it can use its mighty powers of thought to calculate the trajectory of its attacks. This uses so much brainpower it loses the ability to defend itself.
Mighty is unnecessary. It's obviously a shout out to No Guard, and I think it works. I think you might need a comma after brainpower.
Black 2 / White 2: It sometimes disguises itself as fierce legendary Pokémon to repel people, much to the chagrin of trainers who end up capturing it.
I think a lot of people have the idea that Aurumoth should be "regal and rare," but I actually like that this entry gives it a bit of an annoying twist. I'm not sure how popular this entry will be, but it's good work. You can also use a descriptor word instead of people to add to the depth of this. Well on second thought, you have trainers later on... Meh, just something to think about.
Aurumoth, the Celestial Pokemon
Black: Their wings are made of heavy gold. Mysteriously, the gold crumbles into dust when removed, and poachers have learned to ignore them over time.
Great imagery, but it can be shortened. Heavy could be changed to solid to imply both weight
and riches. "The gold crumbles" can be changed to "they crumble." I don't think ignore is the right word choice either. Perhaps avoid? Think it over.
White: This Pokemon is very difficult to train, and so most trainers release captured Aurumoth back into the wild. Rumors that they can psychically compel their trainers to release them have not been confirmed.
Too many words to convey what is a good idea. The idea that Aurumoth has the potential to compel its trainer to release it is intriguing enough, so I'd work on removing the "rumor" aspect of it; it's not needed.
B2W2: For unknown reasons, this Pokemon is capable of hibernating for centuries at a time, encased in its golden wings. Past civilizations have mistaken them for mythological statues, often giving them religious significance.
Does Pokemon ever mention religious significance? I think that is pretty atypical for a dex entry. To be honest, I think that your first sentence is enough; it is more interesting than the second bit. Consider removing it entirely, or perhaps conveying some of those ideas into the first sentence.
Aurumoth, the Golden Moth pokemon.
Black: If fully encased inside of its golden shell, it can withstand any attack. When mating, they combine shells to form a single, impenetrable barrier.
Great entry, lots of mystique. I dunno if dex entries ever talk about mating, so I'd check into that. If that doesn't work out, you could mention something about it can stick around for a long time when wrapped in its shell. Just a thought.
White: The wings, when struck, produce a tone so beautiful that whoever hears it forgets where they are. For this reason, they usually hide from humans.
This is my favorite entry in this topic. I'd edit the last sentence to read as: "For their safety, Aurumoth usually hide from humans." I think the connection between your first sentence and second is a little blurry. It makes sense when you think about it, but I think it could be a bit more accessible. It's good, but toy around with it. If you don't find anything you like, then keep it.
B2W2: Its hoists its massive shell with telekinetic powers. It uses the shell in every aspect of its life, from combat to socialization.
Good entry. A bit long for my taste, but it works out. I wouldn't add anything else to this. Watch for spelling error on the first word..
Aurumoth, the Guardian pokemon.
Black: It has protected humans since ancient times, causing it to be seen as a guardian angel.
I like your entries a lot, nyttyn, simply because they are simplistic. People are trying much too hard to make them long, which I think will hurt them in the long run. Going short and simple is a strength that you're utilizing. This entry is good. "Causing" is a bit of an awkward word; I'd look for a substitute.
White: Its wings are worth a fortune on the market, for the few who can manage to acquire them.
Good. Has a sense of mysteriousness, but also includes some human interaction. Nice.
Black / White 2: Seen as a guardian angel by some, but as a hot commodity by others.
I think "hot commodity" is a little overzealous, but it works. I think that this is a bit too commentator-like in its style; perhaps you could change this to something else. I like that you are trying to tie in the above to entries. Perhaps try to make the connection a bit more accessible.
Final Submission:
Aurumoth, the Aureate Pokémon.
Black: Powerful light emitted from its gem-like stinger is reflected from its gold shellwings and manipulated by its psychic powers to create convincing illusions.
Good, but too many adjectives. "Convincing" and "powerful" can both go. The light is reflected ON the shellwings, not FROM. I like how you made up the term "shellwings," it reminds me of Dewott's entry. Great stuff.
White: Despite their sturdy look, its gold shellwings are brittle and break quite easily. Prospectors who then find these broken remnants are quick to set a gold rush in motion.
First gold adjective is unnecessary. Brittle is unnecessary too; they break quite easily is enough. I think the gold rush part is weird and a bit forced. A gold rush is a big mining excavation. Perhaps you are thinking about collectors or explorers? Something to dwell on.
Black/White 2: It's has the unique ability to see its opponent's movements by foreseeing their trajectory. This allows it to strike with pinpoint accuracy.
I like the concept of seeing the future, but I don't think they connect. Seeing the future attack doesn't equate to making a good attack. I'd try to make this a bit more logical, but it works out. I am overall not a big fan of the dex entries that are trying to get all three abilities, but out of all of them, yours is the best.
Aurumoth
Herald Pokemon
B: Aurumoth's wings are solid gold. However, they crumble into dust if they're removed from the main body.
Solid. I think "stolen" might be a cool word to replace "removed", since it'd add a bit more flavor. Simple tweaks like that can go a long way.
W: Revered as a guardian figure in ancient times. Tablets depict Aurumoth wings as sets of scales.
First sentence has no subject. Just use "It was" in my opinion. "Wings as sets of scales..." what does that mean? It's a bit unclear, since scales has a bunch of meanings. Perhaps it could symbolize the sun's rays, or some other bit of flavor? Food for thought.
This is a good structure for a two sentence entry; short and sweet in both sentences.
2: Aurumoth's presence eases guilt and fear around it. Tales tell of this Pokemon helping great heroes seek atonement.
Accent over the 'e' in Pokemon. I like the flavor, but I think there is a bit of disconnect between the two sentences. Wouldn't the aura make heroes feel courageous, rather than eased of guilt? What if the aura helped criminals resolve to do good? That's just an example. Regardless, I think the two ideas should be a bit more cohesive.
Aurumoth, the Judgmental Pokemon
Black: Despite its great power, it is unpopular among trainers because of its fickle nature and enormous ego.
Great entries, psg. Love the sassy nature; it really puts Aurumoth in a new light. This is a prime example of necessary adjectives. Its nature is fickle; good. Its ego is enormous; adds to the exaggerated tone. Great work.
White: It is revered for its gold-covered wings and angelic origins. The more admiration it receives, the more aloof it becomes.
Hehe, clever. I think "angelic origins" is a bit contrived; perhaps "angelic likeness" would fit a bit more? Something to think about.
BW2: Its long life is spent without companionship. It judges other Pokemon without reservation.
Another fantastic entry. The first sentence itself speaks volumes in seven simple words. The two sentences meld excellently together. Your have one of my favorite entries; great work psg.
Everyone should read the below paragraph for a big tip.
Lots of Pokedex entries in BW2 are
variations on one common idea. Usually, all three entries have a similar theme, but all contain a little bit different information. The ones that are different usually still have two with a linked idea; usually between either the B or W entry with the BW2 entry. Check it out for yourself. While I am not a big fan of KoA's entry, he does this better than anyone else has done in this thread. It's food for thought.
Final Submission
Aurumoth, the Judgment Pokemon
Black: Luck charms are made from their golden bodies. Though normally tough, they will become dull and brittle around negativity.
Choose either dull or brittle; they aren't both necessary. I think "tough" is kind of a weird descriptor too, but I don't have a good substitute. Just something to think about.
White: Aurumoth is said to be able to reveal anyone's true self. Pieces of their armor are often collected for charms, however sometimes Aurumoth wants these back.
The two sentences aren't really connected. In fact, all three of the thoughts don't seem to have too much to do with each other. I'd pick one and extrapolate on that.
B2 W2: Charms made from their shells for luck are said to reflect the nature of their owner. Whether good or bad luck is granted depends on how badly Aurumoth wants its shell back.
I don't get the last sentence at all; it just seems confusing. I'd give another reason for why there is variable in luck. Just an idea though; do what you want!
Final Submission
Aurumoth the Golden Moth pokemon
Black: Because Aurumoth's wings are extremely heavy, it uses telepathic powers to keep them afloat. When Aurumoth loses concentration, the wings fall, sometimes harming innocent passers-by.
SubwayJ, your entries have good ideas, but your sentences are ridiculously long.
As a rule of thumb, one sentence with lots of descriptors OR two sentences with few descriptors is a good way to go. The first sentence is great as a stand alone, in my opinion. I don't think the second is necessary or even that interesting. Perhaps a simple sentence of "It must maintain concentration at all times." would be a good substitute. I dunno; play around with it.
White: Young Aurumoth are often seen trying to fly by flapping their solid gold wings. The wings are very heavy however; this causes the Aurumoth to flop around hopelessly.
Ehh. Does young vs. old have any precedence in BW entries? I feel like those are generally avoided because of evolutions, but I may be wrong. I'd completely change this one, but do what you want.
Black 2/White 2: An Aurumoth's tail produces light based on how healthy it is. An ill Aurumoth will only show a small glow whereas a healthy Aurumoth has the ability to blind whole cities.
Good entry, but there is a simple edit that can make it a lot better. Delete the first sentence. The second one already explains how the first process works: ill = small glow, healthy = blind cities. Something to think about and toy with.
Aurumoth, the Hallowed Pokemon.
Black: When in the presence of those who are lost, Aurumoth emits a light from its bulb and uses it as a beacon to safety.
Good. "And uses it" is unnecessary, but it still works. Mess around with it and see what you like.
White: It is said that it was given life by a celestial being. The more love it receives, the brighter its golden eyes shine.
I don't get the connection between the two sentences. I think the second one is more interesting, so I'd go with developing that theme a bit more and omitting the first. I dunno though, it's up to you.
B2/W2: The more its outer shell is damaged, the weaker its body becomes. Yet, its bright glow never seems to diminish.
Encouraging, but I'm not sure if I'm convinced. I think "body" could be replaced with something like "mind" or "concentration" for a bit more depth on how physical harm hurts its entire being.